Michael, A very nice piece of work. A couple of general and then specific comments. Some of the typos at the end may have already been picked up. cheers Andy 1. General Comments: We refer to a number of additional surveys for which LSST will be the finding chart/followup for detected transients (GLAST, EXIST etc). To put the timelines in context for the LSST it would be useful to have a figure that has the expected timeframe for each of these surveys (and for the CFH Legacy projects, PanSTARRS etc) even if these numbers are fuzzy and evolve. For GLAST and EXIST are we suggesting that their timelines be tied to the LSST if we want temporal optical coverage during their missions? GLAST is projected for 2007 and EXIST 2010+ (I dont know their mission lengths). Does anyone know how much of their missions will intersect with the a projected LSST telescope. In most of the science cases we mention PanSTARRS but dont really state where the science cases stand when PS4 is complete. It seems from all of the sections that the 4 telescope PanSTARRS is the most relevant precursor project (it hits the time domain, covers a wide field and touches on many of the science goals). We will learn a lot from PS about how to do the survey and where to refine the science. It would be useful to address the leap in depth, areal coverage etc that LSST will make and what we think the science will be post-PS4. I know PanSTARRS have a series of DRMs for various science goals it would be interesting to get their perspective. 2. Specific Comments: Page 8: In the PHA section are we recommending more research into Tsunami as from the text we seem to say that we have little understanding of the correct damage model from Tsunami. Page 14: The orbit linkage I think is in good shape from our prototypes on PS data but it is an interesting problem when we push into the noise (I'm not saying you change the wording) Page 20: and a couple of other places (e.g. Page 50). I think when we say photometric accuracy we should be clear and refer to accuracy of the photometric zeropoint and its variation across the sky as it is easy to confuse this with S/N requirements. Page 47, Section 7.4.3: It would be good to address Differential Chromatic Refraction (DCR) when talking about the shear systematics. Given the need to cover 15000 sq degrees we have to hit large airmasses and coadd data over a range of airmass. We will detect these effects (i.e. the shifts will be more than a pixel and source color dependent). Testing for the systematic would be straightforward as we know the direction of the effect but we should acknowledge that we will need to deal with this problem. Page 48, Section 7.4.5: I would like to add something like "While the required Gaussian dispersion in the photometric redshift relation of 5-10\% in (1+z) is achievable from current ground-based surveys the requirements on the controlling the non-Gaussian tails of this dispersion are an order of magnitude more stringent than surveys currently achieve." What I mean is that I just finished some photoz simulations for the PS people that show that, at the limit of the survey, even at a S/N of 10 in all bands that we get about 5% outliers in the redshift relations. Based on the weak lensing numbers I think we need to control these outliers to better than the 1% level to get the mean redshifts right. So this is going to be a real challenge for the tomography work - we are also finding this a challenge with the SDSS data. Page 49, Section 7.5.2: In the second paragraph it is not just the photometric accuracy that is critical it is the measurement of fluxes at faint magnitudes (in different passbands). Making a 0.5 mag error in the flux of one band due to poor deblending, cosmic rays etc is as big a problem as getting the zeropoint wrong (as these produce catastrophic redshift errors not just a small systematic offsets). Page 50, Section 7.5.4: the depth of the imaging surveys should include a S/N associated with these limits Page 51, first paragraph: It would be good to state that this is a fundamental question of how we measure magnitudes of galaxies at faint flux limits. Page 65, Section 9.3: For the extended science section; with LSST we can characterize galaxy clustering as a function of type, luminosity etc from z=0.5 to z=1.5. This should impact on clustering models, measures of bias and galaxy formation. Also LSST has some powerful implications for the Integrated Sachs Wolfe effect. A paper by Cooray, Huterer and Baumann has an interesting comparison of what you might get from ISW with the next generation of telescopes and how it complements the SNe and lensing measures (astro-ph/0304268). The errors on their ISW predictions are overly optimistic (by a factor of two at least) but the fact that they are almost orthogonal to the SNe is powerful. I'd be happy to send you a paragraph tomorrow if this is useful to you. Page 71, Data Systems: One additional point would be the need for the algorithm development to be done upfront for DCR, asteroid linkage, optimal coaddition of data, optimal photometry of faint sources etc. The are many algorithmic challenges ahead that we should be investing in - we talk a lot about the science and telescope but not too much about investing in the algorithm research that may end up being the limiting factor on the quality of the data products. Page 94: I like the statement on data access (Appendix D). I'd like to see the data access statement moved to a more prominent place (e.g. maybe the first appendix). I think it is important we make this statement upfront as delivering the data rapidly to the public (after some verification phase) has to be one of the drivers (and requirements) for whomever builds the LSST. We should also add that the data has to be delivered with the metadata for understanding the selection functions (depth etc) associated with the catalog/database as a function of position on the sky (i.e. LSST must not just dump a catalog on the community it has to be a useful resource). 2. Layout + Typos: It could be just our printer at Pitt but having wider borders around the text would make it look better. Page 14: References wraps incorrectly on my version Page 21: References wraps incorrectly Page 25, last paragraph, first sentence: "A glimpse of the time-domain...."-> "The ongoing SDSS variability survey provides a glimpse of the time domain discoveries that will be made possible by the LSST" Page 43, Section 7.2.4, "constraints on nature of dark energy" -> "constraints on the nature of dark energy" Page 49, Section 7.5.2: I would prefer $r_{AB}$ as the nomenclature instead of ABmag or that we ensure that we specify in AB mags throughout the document. Page 49, Section 7.5.2, first para: "is adequate" -> "are adequate" Page 51, Section 7.6, para 2: "At leat" -> "At least" and the remaining lines seem truncated. 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